[Vampyr]

I didnt take the time to click on your other two, but I will someday. The one in your post was great, I really liked it. Very sweet. Good work. Your a great poet. Here is one of mine, enjoy: (keep in mind that I am a story teller/writer I am much better at stories.

Rednuth Mrots
By: Zak

The ground swam with a gaseous solid,
It was smoky in form,
But solid in power,
It showcased itself to its full potential,
Its body was a black and purple enigma,
Swirling, bulging, contracting, exploding.

It morphed to its full size,
miles in length,
The sky above trembled in fear,
The Rednuth Mrots could rip it apart.

Its rain was like bullets,
Fast and furious,
explosive and accurate,
The Rednuth Mrots released its daggers from its smoky sheath,
The rain flew up,
Each drop a kamikaze liquid,
The Rednuth Mrots could rip the sky apart.

They sky was full of holes,
The rain had done its job,
Wounded its prey,
The Rednuth Mrots gathered its atoms for a brutal attack,
The subatomic particles switched in a blazing frenzy,
One bolt was prepared,
One bolt was enough,
The lighting erupted from its masters eyes,
Diving up with all the speed light had gifted it,
As it surged toward the sky, it ripped the air apart,
But the air was relentless,
It would not so easily give way, and it struggled to hold on,
But the Rednuth Mrots was too powerful,
And the Lightning broke through,
Cutting a gash in the sky,
The Rednuth Mrots could rip the sky apart.

When the air was shattered,
It flew off into oblivion,
Its quaking atoms still residing in the space,
Each atom released its dieing scream into the night,
A scream the Rednuth Mrots enjoyed,
A scream known as thunder.
The thunder had no power in itself,
It could only roll,
Roll into the black void that was the Rednuth Mrots,
The Rednuth Mrots cradled the thunder, Magnifying it and echoing it within itself,
Giving the Rednuth Mrots a voice that spoke fear,
The Rednuth Mrots could rip the sky apart.
Rip the sky apart...