Battle Royale Part1

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Originally Posted by Dylflon

Thanks for thine feedback. I will go into more detail. I just wanted to put the beginning together quickly so I could start writing the more exciting stuff.

I did read through it myself again. I'll go back and improve it now.

Try not to hurry through certain parts to get to stuff you would like to write better. It makes the story suffer.


*shrugs and walks away*