Poetry

Vampyr · 10-11-2003, 02:21 PM

I laughed, I cried!

Random Perfection, two thumbs up!

Dylflon · 10-14-2003, 06:17 PM

I wrote a poem for my english 10 class last year. I got 12 out of 10 on it. Then for fun I submitted it into a poetry contest. I'm now published in two poetry books and one 3 disk CD-ROM set. If they keep using it I might get a cash prize. I think the top prize is $10,000 and then there's some $1,000 prizes.

I didn't even think it was all that good.

Dark Eyes
By: Dylan Innes

Nervous silence,
Shaky hands,
Blue Pills,
Dark eyes.

Dry mouth,
Forced swallow,
Uneasy feeling,
Dark eyes.

Mind racing,
Cold sweat,
Spinning room,
Dark eyes.

Pounding head,
Distorted vision,
Numb skin,
Dark eyes.

Heart pounding,
Silent screaming,
Blank stare,
Dark eyes.

Rndm_Perfection · 10-14-2003, 06:20 PM

While it may be basic, Dylflon, it invokes some pretty intense feelings. As well, the poetry guys probably like it because it's a teen's work, and thye want to show the "deep themes of angst and suicide" that a teen thinks about these days.

You could've wrote simply about shooting cats, and they maaay have published it. But this... this is a bit much more, as it managed to capture the "teen suicide" feel. Well done.

Ace195 · 10-14-2003, 06:21 PM

Umm.. It's not bad at all.. your talking about the same site mine's posted on :P.. Yeah don't count on any prizes. I won some dead poetry society award for trying to breathe and I still haven't recieved it.

Dylflon · 10-14-2003, 07:01 PM

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Originally Posted by Ace195

Umm.. It's not bad at all.. your talking about the same site mine's posted on :P.. Yeah don't count on any prizes. I won some dead poetry society award for trying to breathe and I still haven't recieved it.

I'm not expecting anything.

I figured it was a scam. Heh.

Shadow_Link · 10-14-2003, 07:39 PM

Some great stuff guys. Rndm_Perfection, would it be possible for you to post your "My Valkyrie poem" in a different font? It'll be easier on the reading eyes

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Rndm_Perfection · 10-14-2003, 08:52 PM

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Originally Posted by Shadow_Link

Rndm_Perfection, would it be possible for you to post your "My Valkyrie poem" in a different font? It'll be easier on the reading eyes

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Sure thing. If this is still difficult, I'll remove the background and make the text black:

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Ace195 · 10-14-2003, 09:05 PM

yeah thats still an awsome poem again +rep :P